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I need a little help…I’m stuck on a scene in Crashed…

So I’m working on a scene in Crashed…but I keep getting stuck on the arrangement of words…do you think this sounds all right?

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I have to remind myself to breathe.

Have to force the thought into my head because she’s just singlehandedly ripped apart and pieced me back together simultaneously. And yet the sight of her has left me raw and abraded with tomorrows that will never be.

That I can never get back.

That were never mine to keep.

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Hmmmm…not sure. I guess I’ll keep it in there and see how the rest of the scene plays out…

20 Responses

  1. he line sounds fine to me. Perhaps I may take out a few of the words. But that I’d just me. If I had more in the story to ho on. Can’t wait for crashed.

  2. My only thought is how do you get back a tomorrow that has yet to come to be?? Your writing is amazing!!!

  3. Why has that got me worried? I just want a HEA especially after the cliffhanger of all cliffhangers… come on superheros work your magic 🙂

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